1, had 改为took
2 many 改为 lots of 或者much
3 because of 改为 thanks to
4 hard 改为harder
5 最后一句 you 改为them
6 把文章中过多的so 用hence, therefore 等同义词替换
I’am studying science
第二排的there are many 改为there is a lot of
第三排改为So she hoped I could keep going.
第四排sience 应为science.后面一样。
倒数第二排my 只需前一个，you改为my teachers.
1.So she hoped I can hold on. can应该为could
2.My math teacher thought I was a hard-working student in math.
最后那个in math不要比较好
3. Then my English teacher praised I was good at speaking.
改成Then my English teacher praised me，she thought my speaking was good。
这个文章看起来总觉得怪怪的~~~= =~
初中水平还可以嘛!~呵呵~
我的建议是:
1;so最好都小写,前面用逗号,这是个连词,最好不要单独成句.
2;还有Because of them,I found my advantages and my disadvantages.这句话中表达优点和缺点的两个单词用的不是很恰当,那是有利和不利的意思,应该用shortcomings和merits
found改成现在时find应该好一些~
呵呵~你觉得呢?
I am Peter,a student in Class Three. The final examination had finished last week,and today I received my Report Card. Many teachers' advices had been left in the Report Card. My math teacher thought I was a hard-working student in math,so she hoped I can hold on. At the same time my English teacher praised I was good at speaking. And my sience teacher believed I could have done better,so she adviced I should work hard in sience. But my history teacher was very disappointed because he thought I was lazy boy, and he wanted me to spend more time in history. For this,I found my advantages and my disadvantages. I will work hard,and won't make them dispointed.
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