老师，您好。我是高三学生，有一篇英语作文想请您帮忙看一下并且估个分。 O(∩_∩)O谢谢！

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Without putting up with the difficulty of going out from concoon, there had not been a strong body and beautiful wings for the butterfly just like children at present.
I personally feel that only suffering life can make a person grow up. However, many children are unique ones in their families.parents always love their children as much as they can. Dads go on doing the same things so long as children gradually become more and more selfish and have no abilities to deal with problems when bad situation come up. What;s more, these children will become more and more reliant/dependent. They can not graduate from schools to go into society.
If I am the parent of these children, I will ask him or her to finish something they can do by himself/herself and them what is right, what is wrong when she/he is a little baby. It is not until children
can't fly in the sky that parents feel worried.!
总体来说，意思是写到了。但句子中的错误较多。