请英语高手帮我改一下我的英语四级作文（语法和用词），万分感谢

especially the teachers and the students 第一个单词后加among

Some college teachers think that students shouldn't have a boyfriend or a girlfriend in school because it will effect their study 中a boyfriend or a girlfriend 改为复数 还有effect改为affect

So it goes without saying that students shouldn't have a boyfriend or a girlfriend in school.这句话与上一句之间逻辑性不强，连接太突兀，之前应多做解释

However,the college students hold the idea that it isn't a good thing that the teachers are against the love between the students
这句话太繁琐

have a love
talk with his love 表达欠佳
it is different his friends and parents 这句错误

So there is no-doubt that the teachers are against the students in love. 其中no-doubt 用在这里意思不对
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Love and study while in school

When it comes to the issue between study and love while in school/university, opinions vary largely depending on different group of people, especially among teachers and students. Some college teachers think that love have a negative effect on mental development of a student's school life, which may result in a serious lag on his study. Therefore, loves become inappropriate affairs in school in their eyes.

However, the college students hold an opposite idea that loves can rich a student's life in school, thus motivating his emotion and making greater effort on this study. Besides that a lover will be a great listener when one has an anxiety needed to be shared with.

"Every coin has two sides." It is no exception for the love itself. It conduces to one's study and happiness when it conducts properly, while if going in a wrong manner it becomes a resistance on his life in school. For example, loves built in school are usually much sincere and reliable than those established in office. Moreover, this type of bonds and connections in school will have a significant effect on their later friendship, or even marriage. However, on the other side, developing love sometimes takes a lot of time for a student, which correspondingly will shorten his study time. Further more, extra money spending could becomes another problem for a unemployed student.

尽量不改变原文意思了, 当作是抛砖引玉吧~

语句可以简洁些：

标题建议为： College Students' Love and Study(learn含义宽泛，study更合适)
第一段可合并：In college, teachers and students have different views toward love and study. Some stern teachers insist(换个比think好看的词，避免重复过多) that love among students is sure to affect their study.however, the students hold the opposite opinion.

Just as (删去 a popular)the saying goes ,"every coin has two sides",(loving and learning is no exception于as从句重复，建议引致后句) ,（love has good and) negative aspects.To begin with,the students who have a love will spend more much money to buy some gifts for their love,but they have not ability to earn,(增加：so this expensive love increases their families' economic burden)In addition ,more or less
,it will affect the students' study .In another word ,it still has positive aspects .It can help the students get along well with their love after graduated.