周一是我英语演讲！求大神帮我修改翻译的句子！感激不尽！

1.第一句 我的名字是Lucy，这已经是英文名字了，后面还要再说一个“我的英文名字”干什么。后面怎么还有德语名字，德文你会念吗？
2.还有一句：My birthday is (on) October.你少些了介词on。
3.德国队是the German team。
4.my favorite football stars ，star你没有加s，你后面讲了不止一个你喜欢的明星。
5.开始介绍明星应该为The first star is Philip Lahm . 不应该说成This is Philip Lahm
6. he is I most like thestar 改为 He is my most like star.
7.你那个“奉献”应该用contribution，高贵的也应该改为high 就行。你翻译的词一看就是用翻译器弄的。
8. He and Loew led theGerman team won the Brazil World Cup champion.改为He and Loew led the German team to win the Brazil World Cup champion.
9.I also like astar, Leo Messi. 改为I also like a star named Leo Messi.
10.谦逊应该是modesty。
11. althoughhe is the German team of rivals, but I still likehim. 这句改为 although he is a rival of the German team , I still like him.（but 和although在句子只能有一个）
12.As a German fans改为As a German fan（去掉s）
13. I think, no matter who the opponent改为 I think no matter who is the opponent
14. appreciate and abide by the moral.改为 appreciate and comply with morality.
望采纳

My birthdayis October 20th--------------------------My birthdayis October is on 20th
he is I most like thestar--------------------------------------he is the star i like the most
应该就这么两句了！！！！！！
采纳吧！！

My birthday is on 20th of october.
Today, i would like to introduce my favourite football star.
He is the star I like the most.
As a German fans, I would like to say that, no matter who was the competitor, we should learn to appreciate and be ethical.
To this end 《《《 可以不加。 最后说 Thank You 就可以了